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PostSubject: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Mon Dec 15, 2014 1:49 pm

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Name: Jack (Human) / Waffe der Sehnsucht (AI System)

Age: 21(Jack) / Waffe der Sehnsucht (unknown mentally and physically unavailable)

Gender: Male physically (Jack is mentally male as well) / (Waffe der Sehnsucht is mentally female)

Physical appearance:

Jack's face is a bit oval shaped making him look younger than he really is. Jack face looks a bit empty most days given the façade that he doesn't care for others that much. Where as Waffe der Sehnsucht looks more like she is alert and playful most of the time unless given the order to fight /or kill then she look jus plane creepy. In height Jack appears seemingly 5'7 or around that height most of the time from his slothful nature and posture. Only standing at his full height at 5'10 when he is either upset / angry or trying to be polite to a person. On the contrary Waffe der Sehnsucht always stands at their full height of 5'10. Jack eyes are a light sky blue and a lot of the time either full of emotions long since buried or having very stoic look to them most of the time the latter. In a unnatural and mechanical beauty Waffe der Sehnsucht eyes are a dark amethyst purple in color. Most of the time she smiles looking very happy and acts as a child would most of the time. Whether from her programming or a glitch in her system it is unsure if her being sadistic was ever meant to be a part of her. A lot of the time looking a bit more then crazy and insane when she is like that. Their hair color is a light natural red that separates them from a crowd most days. About 158 in weight they look rather feminine in body structure to most people. Not really helping the matter is the fact that they are a bit skinny looking.


Clothing of choice:
Jack’s preference:
He would preferably wear anything black, red or purple in color. As long as it is not silk he will most likely put it on as silk irritates his skin. Shits and T-shirts or basically anything for that matter do not matter very much to him so long as he is clothed. He would prefer jeans over any other type of pants or legging also preferring them to be black in color. Most of the time only caring about the jeans or the color of the clothing.
Waffe der Sehnsucht preference:
So long as most of the colors are either yellow or red in color the AI doesn’t care what designs the clothing has on them. Just like jack silk irritates her skin to a the point she will throw a temper tantrum if it is putt on or suggested to be. In regards to pants or clothing of that area Waffe der Sehnsucht likes to be in a skirt most of the time either short / medium in length or very long dress. All of which she wants to be either red or yellow in color.


Weaponry of choice: (preferred by both Jack and Waffe der Sehnsucht)
Ammo capacity: 5 rounds each.

Two twin 45 colt revolver's custom made with longer bullet chambers and a wider barrel in order to carry and fire Black Talon .300 Winchester Magnum ammunition. The custom revolver has sublimely more velocity, range and impact to the shots fired by normal revolvers because of the ammunition used. Also the recoil is largely increased while the accuracy is slightly off balanced as well from a normal revolver to boot. The guns having a slightly dark red color paint job.


Race: Cyborg

Abilities: Using multiple swarms of nanotechnology, huge amounts of energy and also a failed (bugged) prototype artificial intelligence system. All in order to surpass nature’s boundary and mimic mainly supernatural biogenetic body structure’s for both research and weaponization purposes.

Explanation on how the abilities are gained: The Nano-tech can allow them to fight for longer than most average humans by gathering and using a large about of energy from outside the human body. Most of the time from a power source nearby then or energy collected from a early time that has not been used yet. As of how to fight on par with a vampire is  going to be a bit more detailed than that. As Waffe der Sehnsucht will began to notice  she is inferior to a vampire the Nano-tech will respond to her noticing that as they are programmed to do so. After a vampires DNA is either given or acquired the Nano-tech will be able to replicate it and give Jack's body to fight on par for a short time. The reason Jack's body can not fight for anything other than a short time is this he will become a ghoul which would counter-act the Nano's programming to keep Waffe der Sehnsucht alive/operating. The stronger the DNA becomes the faster he becomes a ghouls meaning less time also meaning less energy overall used.

Weakness:

Overcharged:
Effect: Using ability to fight longer (beginner) or on a supernatural level (advanced and above) more than 3 time's in 20 post; more than 10 times in 45 post or 21 in 75 post. Will start to slightly (and slowly) poison Jack and cause minor glitches in Waffe der Sehnsucht system. The poison can be cured and glitches fixed but both are highly expensive to pay for and hellsing has already refused to pay for it as it would be a personal problem caused by stupidity.

Blessed weapons / ammunition:
Effect: will take away the function from the nanotech for Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht to fight ( 2 post from first hit then 2 for every hit after that can stack up to 10 post but can be refreshed unlimitedly. Possibly making it unlimited while in battle. ) on a supernatural level that is above what machinery can give.

Electromagnetic pulses:
Effect: will temporally shut down all the nanotechnology and will force Waffe der Sehnsucht to shut down as well and then restart there/its system(s). The nanotech will take 5 - 20 post for then all to reboot. Waffe der Sehnsucht on the other hand reboots much quicker in comparison taking from 1-10 post.
Note: After the post limit set in place as expired fatigue will automatically occur in both Jack and / or Waffe der Sehnsucht also both can use said abilities.

Beginner:
Can fight for 11 posts on normal human levels before fatigue hits.  11 post cooldown. Nothing special is gained other than that.
Traits: Enhanced longevity (cyborgs do not age the same as humans), slightly resistant to blunt weapons.

Advanced:
Can fight supernaturally on par with Category F vampire’s for 9 post’s once per battle. 9 post cooldown.
Traits: Enhanced longevity (cyborgs do not age the same as humans), meager strength, agility, stamina, and reflexes, sublime resistance to blunt weapons, meager resistance to guns and blades.

Armored:
Can fight supernaturally on par with a Category D vampire’s for 7 post’s per battle. 7 post cooldown.
Traits: Enhanced longevity (cyborgs do not age the same as humans), sublime strength, agility, stamina, and reflexes, medium resistance to blunt weapons, sublime resistance to guns and blades.

Elite:
Can fight supernaturally on par with a Category C vampire for 3 post’s per battle. no cooldown as they would both be dead. One time use after that is death takes up to one post maybe two.
Traits: Enhanced longevity (cyborgs do not age the same as humans), medium strength, agility, stamina, and reflexes, large resistance to blunt weapons, medium resistance to guns and blades.

Note: The lower levels can be used once the above is unlocked but no switching from tier level to a different tier level in battle or crossing there effect at all. The programming in the Nano-tech will not allow it and would be impossible to even attempt.

Note: That fighting on a Category C for any amount of time will kill Jack and fry the circuits of Waffe der Sehnsucht.

Overhaul:

Can make one supernatural evolution at the cost of a natural devolution somewhere in the body. 1 post duration and cooldown on both the evolution and devolution. After fist use both evolution and its devolution are forever set in stone for the next use(s). 1st Overhaul

Can make a second supernatural evolution at the cost a natural devolution somewhere in the body. 1 post duration and cooldown on both the evolution and devolution. after first use both evolution and devolution are forever set in stone for the next use(s). 2nd Overhaul

Can now make permanent and only non-battle supplementary biological evolution’s to the body. 3rd Overhaul and above

Can now make permanent battle/survival fit biological evolutions to the body. 5th Overhaul and above but only one every two overhauls.


Organization: Hellsing

Personality:

Jack’s Personality:
Jack is mostly just a lazy and slothful person who is most of the time seemingly uncaring about everything. Only rarely does this change at all in which case he will become irritated unless he has freely chosen to be anything other than lazy and slothful. He is shy and a lot of the time will not talk to the person(s) unless he feels that he can trust the person based of their actions he has seen. The same goes for trusting any Organizations only he watches for how the organization performs their duties both in and out of battle. While in battle, thinking one is about to happen, or observing one Jack is very stoic when he can control the AI system. A lot of the time losing control of his mind when he has no time to register that a fight has started and also when afraid or scarred of something. Mostly due to the fact that when Jack loses control to the AI it is from a sneak attack, an ambush or a surprise.

Waffe der Sehnsucht Personality:
Note: That the AI systems voice is softer sounding like a gay man’s and has a bit of a humming to it that sounds like the flicking of a street lamp that is about to die out. Also that was not meant to be offensive to people as I myself am so.
Waffe der Sehnsucht is a very energetic and playful AI System that doesn’t even know it is a computer at all. Almost always kind and smiling to others around her/him it would rather help an enemy than to fight them. As kind hearted as this AI System is it has an equally disturbing sadistic side as well. Most of the time only showing such side when it is commanded to fight for its master. Other than that it is slightly more accurate with a gun then Jack is but is still learning how to handle the recoil on the custom revolvers often getting hit by the gun on accident. Most of the time when it is bored it loses control of jack’s mind and he reclaims after half a minute.

Rank: (Shared by both) Foot soldier of hellsing not the wild geese

Biography:
As a child of age 5 (1991) whose parents never had time for Jack’s or anyone really life was always a bit lonely most of the time. His parents where both scientist just both in different fields of study so they didn’t see very much of each other as well. Both of his parent so obsessed with their work that never made time for him even if they the time to spare. Most of the time his parents stayed at their work even sleeping there most days rarely ever going to their real home so Jack was forced to do the same. A lot of the time relying on the others that worked at his parent job for both food and a good place to sleep in the compound for the night. Since how a lot of the time Jack couldn’t sleep very easily he walked around until he passed out from fatigue.
For many years this went on as Jack’s normal life repeating itself even as he grew older and wiser to the world around him. On his eighteenth birthday Jack was severely surprised to find out not one but both of his parents had remembered his birthday. So overcome with joy he forgot about being afraid of such odd actions they were exhibiting for him. They both promised him a few gifts of unequal measure that should surly make up for forgetting about him in the past. Thought they said that the process may hurt him it would be worth it if he wanted the gifts they promised him. Using him unwillingly as a puppet rather then to see him killed in order to further their organization's experimentations on the human body for which they needed a willing subject to proceed legally.
Like most scientist that work as a team their research both lead to this moment from the beginning to the present day (2004). Putting Jack under a few light sleeping drugs thinking it wound be enough for such a skinny man. Unfortunately they were wrong about that as he was still about to hear a few thing of little clarity and fewer understanding. Still blind to the real world around him from his stupidity that came from his joyful hope at his parents loving him. Trying to talk in incoherent words to the handsome male doctor that would be helping his father implant the AI System into the back of his neck. Sadly that little display of humanity only got him knocked unconscious by his own father who silently stated to cry at that.
About two and a half hours later he began to awake in the compounds infirmary with a weird feeling in his entire body as well as a huge pain in the back of his head. Remembering the father hitting him Jack felt very childish for believing in their lies to start with. Knowing this would lead to nothing good at all know matter how he went about it. Quickly looking around to make sure it is safe Jack hops up out of the infirmary bed and rushes to the door of the room. Sadly this looked like the end for him ever living freely anymore as he seen a military or so he thought solider heading this way at a slow walking pace. With nowhere else to hide except the bathroom Jack knew if he hid there the others would know he was there as well. Deciding to face his fate with some dignity instead of cowardice like he normally would goes back to his bed and sits waiting on them to enter the room.
Seeing him awake seemed to have been a bit of a surprise to his father and mother as they entered the room together but not so much to the soldier though. Both parent seeming more than a little irritated as Jack said hello in a rather rude and insulting manner. As he then proceeds to properly say hello to the soldier Jack began to examine his body with no effort in hiding his lust for the man. This in turn got Jack hit upside his head with the back of the gun carried by the soldier. His father getting rather angry at the soldier for hitting Jack promptly saying in anger that the “experiment” he just hit was worth more than the lives of his whole family put together. As those words left his father’s mouth something inside of Jack died that day.
With anger seeping into the very core of bones for his parent at that days actions he may have truly lost his humanity on that day alone. Jack trying to make a deal with the soldier promises to serve with their military just so long as they get him away from his home at the compound. In which the soldier reply’s that he doesn’t have the proper rank in order to issue such a command but is willing to relay the message. After about a month since the soldier left the compound he gave up on being move away from his irritating home. Willingly letting only his mother preform her experiment on him mostly dealing with her nanotech research and their effect on the human body. After a while about another two months a message came along with an escort for Jack to be moved to a military base out in Brittan instead of America liked he thought it would be.
Apparently they saw his as only an experiment or at least a failed on that is for the military was gifting him to Brittan as payment for their debt to them. In his mind he was pissed at being a sort of payment to another country but in his heart he was crying at being left on his own again. It seemed like the organization he was being sent to is named Hellsing. Saying that they are currently in a war with vampire’s Jack laughed at first not really caring if they seen him. That was up until Seras flicked him up side his forehead and sending him flying a few feet back. Gladly agreeing to help them so long as they are honest to him. Current year is the present day (2007) having on multiple situations switched over into Waffe der Sehnsucht system servers. Working mainly as a soldier and if not assigned to a mission as a male maid; willingly of course.


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Intro Post:
It was a few minutes ago a bright and sunny day for the most up until a few seconds ago that is. The sun was shining on the grass as it was still gleaning with dew from the morning. A few clouds could still be seen as you passed under them while you went about your day. It seemed as if nothing could go wrong for as beautiful as the day was. Then out of nowhere it started to rain even with the sun still mostly out and about. Ruining the little bit of natural beauty that anyone could find in this city or any other for that matter. Sighing in his heart that such a thing so beautiful can be so quickly ruined by something that it thrives from in order to life.
Lifting up his hood to keep from getting rained on thinking all the while it is a shame that such a day was going to waste. Walking slowly and in silence he was sad that the day had taken such a sour turn for the worse. Deciding to go home and rest for the day it seemed as if there was nothing else to do for now at least. Hoping in the back of his mind that his employers would have something for him to do by now. As nothing else really took his mind of the pain of everyday life other than enjoy nature or his job. Walking past the bar about half a mile from his home deciding it would be a nice thing to pass the time with. As he is proceeds to check his wallet to see if he would have enough money in order to pay for everything he wanted to buy. An unlucky drunk trying to mug him with a broken beer bottle walks up demanding his money.
Kicking the poor drunk unconsciousness while breaking his already injured leg. Letting out a small scream as he decides kick the drunk again as he walk back out of the store later on today. Limping inside the tiny little bar that seems even smaller on the outside then it really is. It is almost empty as a ghost town that you would see in a horror movie. Trying to make his limping look as much as he can do so; like he is just fine and nothing is wrong. Sitting down at the closest table he could find and sighing in relief from not having to keep putting pressure on his leg. Waiting on a bar tender to come so he can order a drink or two. Knowing full well he will probably spend everything in his pocket by the end of the night.
Social Post:
As the night trailed on and on and into early morning the man with the broken leg is thrown out of the bar for starting a fight. Still limping though he seems unable to feel the pain in his leg at the moment that is anyway. Forgetting about the drunk from yesterday who is still sleeping of a hangover. Without noticing him the injured man lies down next to him and starts sleeping as well. Only to wake up from a bucket of water being plash on him as well has the other drunk from the day time bar keeper. Who is yelling at them to move away from here or he will call the cops. The other drunk not really all the way awake is trying to stand up but failing miserably at it. So in a moment of kindness he really didn’t feel very much he decides to help him by putting one arm under his shoulder so he could stand easier.
Walking him away from the bar with a bit of trouble with trying to wake him up the injured man is apparently better at handling a hangover then this stranger he met yesterday. “Ye stupid drunk; will ye wake up before ye gets us in trouble.” Seems like to the injured man the drunk was not going to awaken very easy. Dragging him to the steps of a church he sits down next to him and began to puke getting his shoe’s filled with the vile bodily liquids. Proceeding to fall asleep again he awoke to the drunk trying to steal his shoes that are still filled with dried up puke from a few hours ago Still smelling strongly of it. “Do ye remember last time ye tried stealing from me ye stupid drunk?” Sighing from utter disbelief at the drunk’s stupidity he kicks of his shoes and allows the drunk to keep them. Taking of his socks that are also matted in dried up puke the injured man gives them to the drunk as well.
Going barefoot he begins walking home to sleep of his hangover with a bucket next to his bed to puke in when needed. Only to have the drunk that now seem to be as well a homeless man on top of that following him for some reason. The injured man picking up his pace a bit too as fast as his injured leg will let him. Gets hope with a bit of fear at why the stranger was following after him for some reason. Starting to think of reasons why the man would do so an also why he is just standing outside the house in the streets. Paranoia sinks in and starts driving his fear into overdrive making him panic as he runs to all the windows and doors to lock them all. After he gets them all locked and thinking he is safe from harm’s way lays down in bed and turn’s on the TV.
Battle Post:
Deciding that it is safe to let go of his fear he relaxes a bit and slumps next to the wall with his feet spread out in front of him.  Changing the channel to a half way played out Freddy Cougar movie as the sound of the window braking from the bathroom caught the injured man attention. Not knowing of it was the movie or his own house the injured man turns down the volume of the TV. As his fear is brought up anew he starts to get a bit paranoid once again. Trying franticly to find anything nearby that could be used as a weapon all to no avail. Suddenly hearing footsteps behind him his fears where instantly confirmed that the drunk was out for blood from yesterday. Hoping that he could find a way out of this very dark and bitter reality of his.
With a revolver at hand the drunk who is now wearing the putrid shoe’s still not cleaned out from the injured man’s puke order’s the injured man to stay still. Not really seeing anyway he could do anything other than comply with the drunken man’s orders. Pondering as to why he is not already dead with a bullet in his skull the injured man curiosity gets the better of him. “Why ye still letting ma live ye drunken piece of shit.” A bit furious at the injured man’s insult to him he shoot’s the man in his uninjured leg and tells him to remember who as a gun and who does not. Apparently the drunk oblivious to the fact that gun’s make a loud and unique sound. Or it may be he simply doesn’t care about that at this moment and is focused only on revenge.
The injured man knowing he can’t win at all tries his best at thinking of a way out of this mess he has gotten himself into. Knowing it is a huge gamble and may even get him killed the injured man thought of a way he could possible get out of this alive. Praying in his mind even thought he has no religion he believes in to just get out of here alive so he could see his family again. Deciding it is about time to try has hand at changing his seemingly short future of his. The injured man speaks with a quivering voice that began to break as he started to speak. All in the hopes of angering the drunk into using all of his bullets so that he could possibly live thought this when the cops arrive later. “Ye stupid … drunk if ye where any uglier ye wouldn’t need that stupid gun t… ” Before the injured man could even finish his sentence a bullet from the drunk into his skull was all that was needed to shut him up.

Note: the injured man killed by the drunk in the RP sample was to be supposable my character for the RP Sample only.


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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Mon Dec 15, 2014 5:56 pm

Can you explain what the Waffe der Sehnsucht system is exactly please?
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Mon Dec 15, 2014 7:35 pm

She is a Artificial Intelligence Computer System that does not comprehend that fact and thinks she is human. Also having a programming that links her to the nano-tech. Hence that is why only now after some time are they booting up and showing that they are active. If you need an explanation they are programmed to follow her command if they can as well as evolve both their system's and Jack's body for her survival.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 11:59 am

It seem to me as if this character was either forgotten or simply just not very well liked. So if in two or possible three days this character would best be deleted. As i will make a new sheet and forget this one ever existed.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 12:50 pm

I don't see a problem with the sheet, I've just been getting kicked by finals. Also, I unfortunately haven't checked anything under the top post of the registry. When I get home, I'll review your sheet.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 3:07 pm

I don't necessarily have a problem with the sheet either. I was waiting for an explanation of that as well. Basically, what you're wanting is a character that accesses the higher abilities in small bursts. Where I do have a bit of an issue is the time it takes for the recharge to happen and the classifications that you listed. In game time being listed as a set amount of days seems like a lot of work to keep track of on your part and I would have an issue with you being able to access the highest tier of abilities right off the bat seeing as it's a fairness issue for other players who have earned the ability. I'm willing to give you up to armored classification in short bursts (7 posts per battle). Beyond that, I'm a little hesitant. I will say that you do have some amazing attention to detail though so with that in mind, I would even being willing to give you a really short burst for Elite classification (3 posts per battle with a 3 battle recharge time). If this offer is acceptable to you, you will have my approval.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:18 pm

Thank you for the kind offer i have made the changes that was asked as of the time of this post. Also a way to not abuse the elites tier ability made it a last resort kind of do or die situation. The elite tier ability is a one time use situation. I will need to change that as well.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:29 pm

K. That's cool then. Once all of those changes are complete, lemme know and I'll get out my gold star stickers!
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:33 pm

Funny enough you posted that sometime when i was either making or sending in the edits.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:37 pm

Coolies. I will say for some of this, your wording is really strange. What do you mean by evolution for the overhaul? Was that there before?
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:41 pm

My one other worry about this character is that you're attempting to make them incredibly complicated. I follow most of what you're writing but I worry that I may be one of the few. I hate to ask you for one more change but can you trim some of this? I'll give you one gold star now and another when that's done.

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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:47 pm

That would be a yes and no question as the first two where changed to replace the two category of power i could not get access to. But if you mean the word alone then yes it has been there the whole time as that is how i gain access to those short burst of power in the first place. Also noticed your second post and i will do the best that i can to make it easier to understand.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:49 pm

Thank you sir. I appreciate it.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:58 pm

I have added an extra post right under the abilities but above the weaknesses to explain exactly how they are gained and why they work the way that they do. Other than that i don't really know how to help make it easier to understand seeing how it is a bit detailed even how it is put together is detailed a bit. Sorry i can't think of anything else at the moment to help with that issue. But science itself is complicated so in turn so is his abilities in some way. If there is anything else anyone wanted to be changed please let me know of it and i'll do my best to edit it accordingly.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 11:23 pm

Alright, I just got home, stand by for a review. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Wed Dec 17, 2014 11:46 pm

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Manga yes but only to the 24th  book and also The Hellsing played on  Toonami 1-9  .

Name: Jack (Human) / Waffe der Sehnsucht (AI System)

Age: 21(Jack) / Waffe der Sehnsucht (unknown mentally and physically unavailable)

Gender: Male physically (Jack is mentally male as well) / (Waffe der Sehnsucht is mentally female)


That's an appearence.

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Physical appearance:
Height: Jack appears 5’10 when standing straight up but looks 5’7 normally; where as Waffe der Sehnsucht always appears 5’10 to most people,
Eye Color: Light blue (Jack) / Dark Purple (Waffe der Sehnsucht),
Hair color: Light Natural Red,
Weight: 158,
Build: Somewhat skinny/Somewhat average.

Meeeh, lists aren't really cool. Could you make it a paragraph and maybe fatten it up a bit? What does their face look like? Stuff like that. Doesn't have to be long, but just a bit more and make it flow better.

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Clothing of choice:
Jack’s preference:
He would preferably wear anything black, red or purple in color. As long as it is not silk he will most likely put it on as silk irritates his skin. Shits and T-shirts or basically anything for that matter do not matter very much to him so long as he is clothed. He would prefer jeans over any other type of pants or legging also preferring them to be black in color. Most of the time only caring about the jeans or the color of the clothing.
Waffe der Sehnsucht preference:
So long as most of the colors are either yellow or red in color the AI doesn’t care what designs the clothing has on them. Just like jack silk irritates her skin to a the point she will throw a temper tantrum if it is putt on or suggested to be. In regards to pants or clothing of that area Waffe der Sehnsucht likes to be in a skirt most of the time either short / medium in length or very long dress. All of which she wants to be either red or yellow in color.

I like black jeans too.

Need less bloodstained clothes wrote:
Weaponry of choice: (preferred by both Jack and Waffe der Sehnsucht)
Twin 45 colt revolver custom made with longer bullet chambers and a wider barrel in order to carry and fire .50 caliber sniper rifle ammunition. Because of this only four bullets can be carried instead of the normal six. The shells have been heavily soaked in garlic powder that has been drenched in vampire blood then left out to dry then grinded back into powder. The reason for that is to make both the Iscariot and vampires temporally lose the ability to regenerate their wounds. The bullet itself is nothing special or has anything unique about it except the shells. The custom revolver has sublimely more velocity, range and impact to the shots fired by normal revolvers because of the ammunition. Also the recoil is largely increased while the accuracy is slightly off balanced as well from a normal revolver to boot. The guns having a slightly dark purple color paint job.

Okay, first lil thing, that ammunition you want to shoot is almost as long as the revolver you're putting it in. Secondly, anything a bullet is soaked in (of this caliber anyway) is usesless, the pressure, gasses, and force of the bullet remove them from it's surface after firing. Even if it were still on the bullet, it would do little to effect a vampire, much less an Iscariot regenerator. [Also, the ammunition you're referring to is .50 BMG.]

I found you've only got one weapon, and no total ammo count as to how much you carry. You miiiight want a rifle or something, but that's just a suggestion.


Race stuff:
 

Okay, so is this a normal person with nanomachines inside them? That is what I'm getting from this, which is cool. Although there's still a couple spots in Abilities that need post counts instead of time. Otherwise, cool.

Illuminati:
 

Well, I...um. I guess Integra will approve the Hellsing part, but using your kid as an experiment is pretty sick. Like Alexiel burning his parents alive kind of sick. I like that, but I'll let the other mods n peeps weigh in.

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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 11:19 am

So if I got this all correct you want me to change as listed. The list of physical appearance into a paragraph, the gun's ammunition / or the gun itself, a post limit on some abilities instead of a time frame, and last but not least parts of the biography concerning Jack's parents. Am I right on this or did I miss a few things; I'll change the things that I listed up above. Please tell me if a had mistaken anything that was written. I'll post a comment when I have completed editing the changes.
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 12:44 pm

Changing the gun is up to you, and I guess if you want a gun that'll rip off your hand, that's fine, but mainly the post counts and the appliance, yeah.

The other mods will have to weigh in on your bio, honestly, specifically Integra on your Hellsing part.

Good luck with your sheet!
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 1:03 pm

I wasn't thinking on it ripping of my hands just so much as making you think before shooting it twice. Now that you said something riffle do a lot of a kick to them don't they realistically it most likely would take my hand off. Also I changed everything that I thought you wanted me to change I even change the ammunition to a smaller type but still riffle. The post count has been added to all abilities instead of time on all .
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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 5:56 pm

I'm assuming Jack would be given to Hellsing with the assumption that they are used to taking in strays now after Seras so it's just one more to add. Therefore I really have no problem with it, and it would help Hellsing understand the technology better.

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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 8:50 pm

You've been pretty accommodating to the requests I've made of you. Here's the real gold star.

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PostSubject: Re: Jack / Waffe der Sehnsucht   Thu Dec 18, 2014 11:09 pm

Whale, it shore seems like a good sheet! I reely look forward to sea-ing you rp!

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