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PostSubject: Nina Valérian   Fri Apr 05, 2013 8:39 am

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PostSubject: Re: Nina Valérian   Tue Apr 09, 2013 7:41 am

I guess this is ready for evaluation.
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PostSubject: Re: Nina Valérian   Tue Apr 09, 2013 8:02 pm

Could you please put the OVA you have watched up to at the top of the sheet please. The pacing in this sheet is rather slow, it takes you a while to get to the point in your character, personality and bio. I'm pretty sure you just tried to make a unbreakable claymore, and why is a cross bow better than a pistol and or smg ?

Also the ability of Celerity, is redundant considering the fact your character has sublime supernatural speed and agility meaning you just hammering in how someone who can't keep up with you won't see you. Also its draculina not Lilith, no where in hellsing do they mention Lilith.
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PostSubject: Re: Nina Valérian   Tue Apr 09, 2013 8:30 pm

It's is my way of RPing, please do forgive me if it didn't come to your liking and so to any of whom who read it though I must put to account that I am proud of my work.. The claymore is durable, hsarp and less in weight but not unbreakable, I never said it was. Lilith is just a nickname, there is no Lilith in Hellsing, I know, it just creativity and I think this site applaud such. The crossbow is better when it comes in being stealth than pistols or SMG, never said anything else other than.

Regarding Celerity, Nina will grow better with this ability, she is specializing in such skill, meaning her current level is better than sublime however less than Vampire C level. She moves fast, making it hard for ranged opponents to lock on her to those of whom same as her level, she is not a blur.

Disclaimer will be put up as per your recommendation, though it will not make the app look good visually.

Much obliged and thanks very much.
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PostSubject: Re: Nina Valérian   Tue Apr 09, 2013 10:14 pm

Don't know what the nicknames have to do with her real name, but okay.

What Jay refers to is a phenomenon called Purple Prose. It's when description has diarrhea and just spews all over everything. Detail is great, but too much just makes things too long and confusing. I wouldn't ask you to rewrite the sheet, but be conscious of it when you play with others.

I enjoy albino characters. Reminds me of Deadman Wonderland.

How many bolts do you normally carry? How many knives does she normally use?

I think I'm okay with the first ability, but the second is basically the same as a power higher level vampires use, so I can't approve of you having it at this point. I'm not understanding why the third power needs to be there. She'll get faster as she ranks up, so I don't really see a point to it besides being a tiny bit faster than other people.

What else does she do besides vampire murder powers? Her skills tell us as much about her as her personality or biography.

Have something against guys who're more fabulous than you, darling?



How and when did she leave the island? Vampires can't cross open water without assistance, so how'd she get herself a boat in the middle of the night?

What did she do after all of this? There's an 11 year gap between turning and her current age.
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PostSubject: Re: Nina Valérian   Wed Apr 10, 2013 4:42 am

Thank you very much all, Please remove this app.
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