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PostSubject: OC   Wed Dec 14, 2011 1:13 pm

Have you see the OVA or read the manga series of Hellsing? If so how far have you gotten? If not please direct your attention to youtube, and watch OVA 1-4 at least. Warning: If you have watched the anime we require you watch the OVA, or read the manga. The anime is not canon. This is not our opinion. This is the law set down by the creator of Hellsing, Kouta Hirano.

Have watched the OVA, the Anime, own both on DVD as well as volume 1-10 manga and read ultimate and generally tend to wallow in extreme fandom. Alucard plush and everything.

Name: (Saeunn)

Age: (23)

Gender: (Female)

Physical appearance: (height: 5'7" weight: 130 slender yet lean frame, very well balanced. Pale skin that shimmers in the light of the moon, ice blue eyes that reflect no emotion framed by elegant waves of golden blonde hair. She has small pale pink lips that are usually twisted in a cruel grimace and rarely part for speech. She has a scar running from the base of her right ear along her jaw ending around the middle of her throat and a scar on her upper left arm from being bitten by a vampire.)

Clothing of choice: (Baby blue bell bottom jeans and a rock band t shirt with a light weight bullet proof vest underneath. Converse style flats for shoes and a gold and emerald necklace.)

Weaponry of choice: (her own hands, but if she must use a gun, it'll be some form of rifle pushed upon her by walter)

Race: (special human)

Abilities: (slight increase of strength under the right conditions. Other powers unknown, if there are any.)

Organization: (Hellsing)

Personality: (How does your character feel? - Cold and generally in a sour mood
Act? - distant and cynical, but loyal and ready to help anyone of the hellsing organization, provided the problem is worth her assistance.
Socialize? - Spends most of her time in the library, or at Sir Integra's permission tracking down rare books on vampire lore and other occult/forbidden topics. If someone engages her in conversation, she replies with a cynical or dry remark. However, she is very unpredictable and is prone to the occasional kind statement. Sadly, Integra is the only one she will really voice her thoughts to, if asked.
React to battle?- Saeunn gets lost in battle. Easily provoked she loves the adrenaline, the cold knife of each intake of breath and the feel of bones breaking beneath her fingers. She will go to great lengths to prolong the fight, giving her opponent many chances to get back up and try to win. She is a skilled fighter but can take down opponents above her skill level with the extra boost of vampiric strength in extreme cases and the irrational urge to feel the next blow, to land one in return and taste the blood, the fear.)

Rank: (Currently pending Integra's judgement given her volatile temper and special....condition. Saeunn can be in perfect control of herself, but Integra is logical and requires proof before chucking her into the general ranks)

Biography: (Saeunn has little memories of the time before Hellsing, and they are all just unclear flashes of what her life once was. Through long conversations she can recall what happened to her the night of The Incident, the night she was attacked and bitten by a vampire. As she lay fighting her own death, and change, Seras had taken out her assailant and brought her back to Hellsing, much to Integra's disapproval. Alucard had explained to her what change she was about to make but she fought it mentally, physically, and with help from specialists in Integra's personal medical facility, was able to stay human. However, the change did take a small hold on her, and she has the bloodlust of a vampire and grows extremely weak without blood. She finds this particularly frustrating, being of the opinion that if she has a vampire's weakness she should have a bit more of it's strength.)

RP sample: (Battle: Saeunn heard the sharp crunch of gravel beneath boots, and instantly spun to come face to face with a shadowy figure lurking far enough back to elude her heightened sense of smell.

"Do you wish to die tonight?" She spoke, voice barely a whisper. The man stepped into the light, showcasing his pale and gaunt features. A wide smile stretched his face in unnatural angles and two sharp canines heralded trouble.

"Funny thing to say." He replied before his whole body tensed into the language of offense and he shot like a rocket towards the blonde woman before him. Saeunn met his attack with a smile, easily dodging and grabbing him into a choke hold from behind. The man, being a vampire, twisted out of her slender arms with little effort and bent her backwards, head tilted to the side to expose her neck. Saeunn allowed him one moment to convince himself of victory before repelling the minor compulsion he had been using to assist in subduing her. Having felt his control lessen he paused in shock, and then made a grimace of pain. The young woman had been carrying a tiny silver knife, concealed in the lining of her jacket.

"Odd that when you find something funny, you neglect to laugh." She seized her small opportunity and plunged the blade into his heart, causing instant death. She stared down at the messy kill and sighed, "I wonder what life I've snuffed out this night."

Batttle 2 (Losing): Saeunn ducked and attempted to dodge the man's fist, but was caught off guard and suffered a punch to the jaw. It took her a few seconds to recover and in that time that man had started a charge to catch her mid section and knock her hard against the wall, successfully disorientating her further. She landed a swift blow to the back of his neck, causing him to back up a few steps to properly cope with the pain. Taking the opportunity to turn the tides, Saeunn rushed him in a sloppy tackle and wrestled him to the ground, punching wildly all the while. Through strenuous effort, the man managed to roll the girl's petite frame off of his own portly body and regain control of the situation. He eagerly wrapped his bloody sausage fingers around her neck and squeezed, only letting go when her eyelids fluttered shut and her body went limp.

"That was one hell of a bar fight." his mate commented, letting go of the girl's friend who had tried to intervene, "Even before you took it outside."

RP post 1: "But it tastes positively revolting when it's cold and stale. I refuse." Saeunn shoved the packet of blood back towards the frustrated butler.

"I can heat it up prior to consumption if you so choose, Saeunn, but you must drink blood regularly. If not, you will become even weaker than the average civilian." Walter rubbed his temples before meeting the girl's steely stare. She said nothing further, and did not have to. "I will tell Sir Integra of your uncooperative behavior and have you suspended, or worse. Now, drink."

"Walter, if this blood is all donated, why can't I drink it directly after it is taken? Just draw the blood out into the bag, patch the suckers up, send them away, then give the fresh and warm bag to me directly after. Easy. I don't see you eat soup cold, or drink your coffee the day after it is brewed. Why can't I feed from those you send me to kill? It has been proven already my bite will not turn a human." Saeunn's tone was fierce and her words harsh, and there was a slight shade of red coloring her eyes.

"It would be against everything Hellsing stands for to just allow you to feed off of the living, even if they are already marked for death. I can, however, speak to Sir Integra about allowing you to consume the newly donated blood, but for now you must drink what I have given you now." Walter's tone was twice as sharp and his hard expression told Saeunn she was pushing the limit. With a small nod of her head she picked up the packet, a sour look on her face.

"Very well, but I will persist with this. If you do not speak to her soon I will."


RP post 2: The night held a distinct chill, though it was not entirely cold. Many had already tucked themselves in and fallen asleep, so the Hellsing mansion lay quiet and still. There was a slight breeze on the roof, enough to blow long strands of hair into Saeunn's face. There were few clouds, and when one did pass they would drop a few mournful sprinkles of rain onto the roof and depart. As if the heavens themselves were crying, caught up with some inner strife just like the rest of the world. The usual dull ache ebbed and flowed through the young girl's chest and salty tears mingled with the earthbound drops on her flawless face, though one could not tell one from the other. A quiet observer would never guess, never suspect the inner agony of the woman so beautiful she could be mistaken for a porcelain doll. The night was tranquil, and it was a night of quiet weeping.

Around three am, a shadow pooled on the roof and a man stepped out from it's depths. The girl did not move, nor show any indication she had taken notice to the sudden presence, but it was obvious she was aware. Black hair fell across crimson eyes, and red fabric rustled as he claimed a seat next to the girl. Within minutes, the first drop fell to his face and ran over high cheek bones to catch on well formed lips. The silence persisted, and remained unbroken long into the night. But it was a fitting silence, and to break it would ruin the serene pain and soft understanding of the great tragedy of life. And so the two sat, silent as the grave, until the sun arose from its murky sepulcher to send the monsters to their own.
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PostSubject: Re: OC   Wed Dec 14, 2011 3:42 pm

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Have you see the OVA or read the manga series of Hellsing? If so how far have you gotten? If not please direct your attention to youtube, and watch OVA 1-4 at least. Warning: If you have watched the anime we require you watch the OVA, or read the manga. The anime is not canon. This is not our opinion. This is the law set down by the creator of Hellsing, Kouta Hirano.

Have watched the OVA, the Anime, own both on DVD as well as volume 1-10 manga and read ultimate and generally tend to wallow in extreme fandom. Alucard plush and everything.

Name: (Saeunn)

Age: (23)

Gender: (Female)

* Physical appearance: (height: 5'7" weight: 130 slender yet lean frame, very well balanced. Pale skin that shimmers in the light of the moon, ice blue eyes that reflect no emotion framed by elegant waves of golden blonde hair. She has small pale pink lips that are usually twisted in a cruel grimace and rarely part for speech. She has a scar running from the base of her right ear along her jaw ending around the middle of her throat and a scar on her upper left arm from being bitten by a vampire.)

Clothing of choice: (Baby blue bell bottom jeans and a rock band t shirt with a light weight bullet proof vest underneath. Converse style flats for shoes and a gold and emerald necklace.)

Weaponry of choice: (her own hands, but if she must use a gun, it'll be some form of rifle pushed upon her by walter)

Race: (special human)

** Abilities: (slight increase of strength under the right conditions. Other powers unknown, if there are any.)

Organization: (Hellsing)

Personality: (How does your character feel? - Cold and generally in a sour mood
Act? - distant and cynical, but loyal and ready to help anyone of the hellsing organization, [1] provided the problem is worth her assistance.
Socialize? - [2]Spends most of her time in the library, or at Sir Integra's permission tracking down rare books on vampire lore and other occult/forbidden topics. [3] If someone engages her in conversation, she replies with a cynical or dry remark. [4]However, she is very unpredictable and is prone to the occasional kind statement. Sadly, [5] Integra is the only one she will really voice her thoughts to, if asked.
React to battle?- Saeunn gets lost in battle. Easily provoked she loves the adrenaline, the cold knife of each intake of breath and the feel of bones breaking beneath her fingers. [6]She will go to great lengths to prolong the fight, giving her opponent many chances to get back up and try to win. [7]She is a skilled fighter but can take down opponents above her skill level with the extra boost of vampiric strength in extreme cases and the irrational urge to feel the next blow, to land one in return and taste the blood, the fear.)

*** Rank: (Currently pending Integra's judgement given her volatile temper and special....condition. Saeunn can be in perfect control of herself, but Integra is logical and requires proof before chucking her into the general ranks)

**** Biography: (Saeunn has little memories of the time before Hellsing, and they are all just unclear flashes of what her life once was. Through long conversations she can recall what happened to her the night of The Incident, the night she was attacked and bitten by a vampire. As she lay fighting her own death, and change, Seras had taken out her assailant and brought her back to Hellsing, much to Integra's disapproval. Alucard had explained to her what change she was about to make but she fought it mentally, physically, and with help from specialists in Integra's personal medical facility, was able to stay human. However, the change did take a small hold on her, and she has the bloodlust of a vampire and grows extremely weak without blood. She finds this particularly frustrating, being of the opinion that if she has a vampire's weakness she should have a bit more of it's strength.)

***** RP sample: (Battle: Saeunn heard the sharp crunch of gravel beneath boots, and instantly spun to come face to face with a shadowy figure lurking far enough back to elude her heightened sense of smell.

"Do you wish to die tonight?" She spoke, voice barely a whisper. The man stepped into the light, showcasing his pale and gaunt features. A wide smile stretched his face in unnatural angles and two sharp canines heralded trouble.

"Funny thing to say." He replied before his whole body tensed into the language of offense and he shot like a rocket towards the blonde woman before him. Saeunn met his attack with a smile, easily dodging and grabbing him into a choke hold from behind. The man, being a vampire, twisted out of her slender arms with little effort and bent her backwards, head tilted to the side to expose her neck. Saeunn allowed him one moment to convince himself of victory before repelling the minor compulsion he had been using to assist in subduing her. Having felt his control lessen he paused in shock, and then made a grimace of pain. The young woman had been carrying a tiny silver knife, concealed in the lining of her jacket.

"Odd that when you find something funny, you neglect to laugh." She seized her small opportunity and plunged the blade into his heart, causing instant death. She stared down at the messy kill and sighed, "I wonder what life I've snuffed out this night."

Batttle 2 (Losing): Saeunn ducked and attempted to dodge the man's fist, but was caught off guard and suffered a punch to the jaw. It took her a few seconds to recover and in that time that man had started a charge to catch her mid section and knock her hard against the wall, successfully disorientating her further. She landed a swift blow to the back of his neck, causing him to back up a few steps to properly cope with the pain. Taking the opportunity to turn the tides, Saeunn rushed him in a sloppy tackle and wrestled him to the ground, punching wildly all the while. Through strenuous effort, the man managed to roll the girl's petite frame off of his own portly body and regain control of the situation. He eagerly wrapped his bloody sausage fingers around her neck and squeezed, only letting go when her eyelids fluttered shut and her body went limp.

"That was one hell of a bar fight." his mate commented, letting go of the girl's friend who had tried to intervene, "Even before you took it outside."

RP post 1: "But it tastes positively revolting when it's cold and stale. I refuse." Saeunn shoved the packet of blood back towards the frustrated butler.

"I can heat it up prior to consumption if you so choose, Saeunn, but you must drink blood regularly. If not, you will become even weaker than the average civilian." Walter rubbed his temples before meeting the girl's steely stare. She said nothing further, and did not have to. "I will tell Sir Integra of your uncooperative behavior and have you suspended, or worse. Now, drink."

"Walter, if this blood is all donated, why can't I drink it directly after it is taken? Just draw the blood out into the bag, patch the suckers up, send them away, then give the fresh and warm bag to me directly after. Easy. I don't see you eat soup cold, or drink your coffee the day after it is brewed. Why can't I feed from those you send me to kill? It has been proven already my bite will not turn a human." Saeunn's tone was fierce and her words harsh, and there was a slight shade of red coloring her eyes.

"It would be against everything Hellsing stands for to just allow you to feed off of the living, even if they are already marked for death. I can, however, speak to Sir Integra about allowing you to consume the newly donated blood, but for now you must drink what I have given you now." Walter's tone was twice as sharp and his hard expression told Saeunn she was pushing the limit. With a small nod of her head she picked up the packet, a sour look on her face.

"Very well, but I will persist with this. If you do not speak to her soon I will."


RP post 2: The night held a distinct chill, though it was not entirely cold. Many had already tucked themselves in and fallen asleep, so the Hellsing mansion lay quiet and still. There was a slight breeze on the roof, enough to blow long strands of hair into Saeunn's face. There were few clouds, and when one did pass they would drop a few mournful sprinkles of rain onto the roof and depart. As if the heavens themselves were crying, caught up with some inner strife just like the rest of the world. The usual dull ache ebbed and flowed through the young girl's chest and salty tears mingled with the earthbound drops on her flawless face, though one could not tell one from the other. A quiet observer would never guess, never suspect the inner agony of the woman so beautiful she could be mistaken for a porcelain doll. The night was tranquil, and it was a night of quiet weeping.

Around three am, a shadow pooled on the roof and a man stepped out from it's depths. The girl did not move, nor show any indication she had taken notice to the sudden presence, but it was obvious she was aware. Black hair fell across crimson eyes, and red fabric rustled as he claimed a seat next to the girl. Within minutes, the first drop fell to his face and ran over high cheek bones to catch on well formed lips. The silence persisted, and remained unbroken long into the night. But it was a fitting silence, and to break it would ruin the serene pain and soft understanding of the great tragedy of life. And so the two sat, silent as the grave, until the sun arose from its murky sepulcher to send the monsters to their own.

Translation…
* Integra Look-A-Like with scars. Marry Sue.
** Underlined section? Total Marry Sue and unknown abilities like you have suggested are NOT allowed unless you present upgrades later on in the RPG.
*** … Integra would shoot you. Trust me. The Integra here, who is a perfectionist, 100% accurate to the history, behavior, and habits to Integra F. W Hellsing from the OVA and Manga, would have you shot on site.
****What… the hell? All I see is the watered down version of Alucard behavior. The female version of him. All I see is Marry Sue or as we here at Hellsing RPG prefer to call it… Bella Sue from Twilight behavior.

I tear personalities apart. I will explain my after the listed.
[1] Alucard trait.
[2] Alucard has been around for a good long while… he knows all this shit already.
[3] Alucard… again.
[4] … I do not know what the fuck that is, but it’s not going to click.
[5] When Integra asks Alucard to speak his mind, he does. Other than that his remarks are unpredictable. Oh I see now; Number 4 is just like 1-5.
[6] … Once again… A-L-U-C-A-R-D.
[7] ……. Stronger than Alucard? Anderson Trait?... NOPE. Just trying to be on an equal level with Alucard.
> Look. I am the kind of person who will skip damn near everything and look at the personality first, weapons second, and third the abilities. I tear personalities apart. It’s what I do best, my hobby, and my profession as a writer and my focus in my education. To me a personality makes the WHOLE profile trump over any abilities, weapons, bio, race, organization… EVERYTHING. A personality MAKES THE WHOLE IDEA OF AN ORGINAL CHARACTER SHINE. Why? Because it is different. It’s not who you are. It is a living, breathing organism that YOU created that is not you or anything else. It can stand alone and beam of excellence. This personality is dry, underdeveloped, and attempting to be something that already exists. It’s trying to match up with a cannon on so many levels it cannot be ignored. Like one person said to me, he aimed to make a high quality product for an OC. It turned into another Bella-Sue. But he grew from it and evolved. If you wish to do that then you’ll learn as well to make something unique from everything else, and not stealing ideas that are already in play and exist here on this forum.

No she’s not invincible… you hinted on that with the bulletproof vest.

This needs so much reservation on more than half the profile and correct coding. You need to toss this and make something completely different. There’s no way this can pass into an approved vote. If you need help, consult the people who have been here the longest. That would be the people who are colored pink, lilac, and dark purple. Others who have been here a while would be Father Anderson, Carmina Hancock, Kilquan Suffraxon, and Void. Jump into the chat-box located at the bottom of the home ribbon and talk to us. Message us. Ask questions here on your own thread.

Other than that, I cannot approve this. I do, however, wish you luck.

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PostSubject: Re: OC   Wed Dec 14, 2011 5:18 pm

Don't even bother with voting; special humans aren't allowed to begin with right now. But yes, everything above as well.
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