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PostSubject: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptySun Jul 31, 2011 6:47 pm

i have both read the manga and watched the OVA series

Name: Clay Lantz

Age: 43

Gender: Male

Physical appearance: Clay's eye is light blue, his hair is brown and short and his nose slighty bigger than your average size, he wears an eyepach very much like that of bernadotte but does not posses any of that man's charming face, he also have a beard since he doesnt bother to shave that he have tied into an tall rope that splits in two. There isnt much to see about his appearance as it is nothing special but the eyepatch and his bizare viking style beard, which might actualy be quite a lot to some but Clay doesnt think of it as much.

Clothing of choice: Whatever he requires to use on the battlefield which would be his dusty kevlar and not too basic uniform, on the outside it looks like the normal gear but he isnt as fat as it seems when he wears it. The uniform is filled with the same material as in kevlar's but its an very much lighter verision so it wont hinder his movement too much.

Weaponry of choice: RPG, modified glock with blessed silver bullets and heavily armed with all kinds of explosives also made for anti-freak havoc, and with that he also carries 3 grenades with silver shards and 2 detornators for several packages of customized C4, one small with single button for quick destruction and one large pad with several buttons used for blowing up things from many locations or to separate the explosion.

Race: Human

Abilities: Clay is just an ordinairy human with a passion of blowing things up, hes the best man for making noise but terrible in any kind of close combat, due to all the things he have equiped he is rather strong for an old man but since he is OLD and carying all the extra stuff he is easily fatigued.

Organization: Wild Geese Mercenairies

Personality: Clay is a pyromancer, an explotion fanatic, he loves when things dissapear in seconds with blood stains on the walls. He used to be unstable and loud at most times as he awaits things to go BOOM on his signal. But after being fired from the military he have calmed down a bit but he does get his great moments when allowed to blow the target up, but he wont blow them up without peromission first since hes afraid to lose his intresting job that way.
Rank: Mercenairy Explosive Specialist

Biography: Clay was born in the far away Sweden where he was a trouble child, he would always set things on fire and build grenades that he ofcourse blew up. But when he grew older harrasing the townsfolk wasnt enought so he moved to the USA due to much easier ways to get your hands on weapons and then later on he even joinedc the US army to fight in many wars such as the iran-irak war, ofcourse Clay didnt care much for his homeland or his fellow soldiers but merely enjoyed setting his traps that would blow his enemies to bits in a bloody explotion. It didnt take long for him to lose his left eye since he was careless at first and was ambushed by a man with a knife, after losing his eye he became more careful since if he went blind we wouldnt be able to watch his art in action. Clay was fired from the military a few years later when he ignored a group of soldiers who hadnt evacuated the site yet, he had waited to long and blew them up togeather with his very important target, a dangerous target had been eliminated but he had broken to many pages of the rulebook and was fired imedietly. But Clay still wished for loud bangs and bloody explotions so he joined the mercenairies of Wild Geese with a litle more control not to lose his job again.

Later on the mercenairy group was hired by Sir Integral Fairbrook Wingates Hellsing to destroy monsters, everyone thought of this thing as a big joke since no one believed in vampires, werewolfes and zombies, but that changed when they saw Bernadotte get beaten bloody by a finger from a big busted blonde girl, some went scared and some excited, but Clay was probably the most possitive about it, he had gotten himself a far more dangerous target to play with.

RP sample:

Normal Post: Walking the mansion grounds he was, boring as it is it was still his duty to go on guard once in a while. It should be he who was out there blowing evil to pieces but today he got the shortest straw to stay on guard duty, guarding wasnt his thing one became to much of a target like that, Clay knew that from all the guards he had blown up togeather with the gates. It fitted him better to be in action, and in action it was actualy fun earning your piece of the gold, he watched the horizon while avoiding setting fire to his beard while smoking, it was red in the distance just to annoy him that he wasnt in the battle where the bloodshread was.

Battle Post: Gunfire echoed trough the large walls of the target house the Ghouls just wouldnt end, no matter how many bullets they shot there would always come more of those Ghoul creatures. Screams were heard in the distance, probably from the last civilians in the building. Clay had simple orders to save the civilians from the Ghoul outbreak and ofcourse a backup plan, if the rescue failed they were to blow the place up so clay didnt really mind if the civilians died, all he focused on now was to aim his modified glock at the weakpoints of the ghoul crowd. More gunshots were released and then the radio of command gave them updates of the situation ''there are no lifesigns within the building left, all troops pull back to the transport'' everyone abbandoned their post and sprinted out of the building or atleast tried, one of the Ghouls appeard from nowhere and had sank its teeths into one of the troops in the back, the man keept screaming for help but everyone keept running. When they were outside the troops couldnt help but watch the man getting torn to pieces. Clay pulled up his detonator and slowly removed the safety saying '' we all have to go sooner or later like that on the job'' and when he finnished speaking the house had turned to an flaming pillar of death.

Social Post: They finaly left the vehicle, one man short however, lost to the Ghouls. Clay left the vehicle thinking about when it was his turn to be striken by bad luck, the others arrived out of the armored hellsing truck standing on a line in front of the group leader, Clay joined their ranks aware of that they would recieve bad critic about not watching their surroundings. Most of the men were already in possision with their backs standing tall, very differently from a younger man that was holding back his tears weeping over the lost person, Clay didnt know if they had any relation since the young man was an rather new addition to the team. The group leader who went by the name of John walked up to the boy which he looked like rather than a man weeping like that, when John was at the boys feet he slapped the crying soldier probably to make him regain himself and then shouting in his face ''Boy you took this mission by free will, soo man up and take the consiquences of your actions!'' The boy stood still in shock or fear, Clay couldnt really judge but all commanders and higer ups have the ability to crack down the lower ones, he had seen it to many times.

John turned around to the rest of the group and straighened his back ''The civilians died even with you to help and thats not enought! you let your own ally die just because you didnt bother to check your surroundings properly, its a damn fu*king miracle you arent all dead'' he spat at the ground stareing angrily at them, most of the men were starting to show cowardice when he yelled at them, Clay was no ecception, he felt the same as the rest of the men and kept silent when John spoke. The angry man let up a hole for someone to give a speech for their actions and since no one grabbed the chance Clay jumped in ''You sent the same group for missions 3 days on a row without much of sleep and free time, i think you overestemate most of the men's ability, sir'' Clay didnt give much for his men but merely spoke for his own skinn very well hidden, John looked furious with Clay's counter of words and yelled at him not to uther another word and soo it stayed for Clay did not wish for being bringed of the team.


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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyMon Aug 01, 2011 12:36 am

Added the WIP for you. Also, even though this isn't ready, you should specify "Wild Geese" as his org, since that's the only kind of mercenaries Hellsing hires for the long term.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyWed Aug 03, 2011 5:13 pm

ahh thanks for your help, i think this charracter is complete now, please tell me if theres something youre unhappy about
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyWed Aug 03, 2011 5:54 pm

Took off the WIP for you now.

To start, I don't see much of a need for him to carry around detonators. Unless they've been wired to actually do something, you're just carrying extra weight for nothing. I technically have no problem with it though, so if that's what you want, more power to you.

Next comes my real problems. Firstly, this guy seems way too unstable to be in the Geese. Even if he did somehow get in, I doubt Integra would let him on the property if she had to worry about him blowing up the mansion any time he set foot there.

Secondly, we have your mention of the EU. Sweden didn't join them until 1994, reluctantly at that. Unless all his military history happened in the last couple years in a bunch of wars no one knew existed, I don't see how that's possible.

Change some of this stuff and I'll keep reading.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyWed Aug 03, 2011 6:46 pm

Tod is correct about the EU and Sweden. Also correct that I would not let someone like him on my property. It's fine if someone is a pyromaniac, but it's another if all they do is blow stuff up. The way you have him he's mentally disturbed like Alucard, and most humans like that get put into the looney bin or become serial killers. So maybe adjust that bit of him, and again correct the EU stuff.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyWed Aug 03, 2011 7:03 pm

As a suggestion, you could put in the bio/personality bit the fact that he respects Integra so that he does not blow objects sky high while on her premisses without her permission.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyThu Aug 04, 2011 4:56 am

Ahh thanks for the help, it seems i didnt think too well... i never thing too well... never think...
well as i said thanks for the assistance i will start making changes at once
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyThu Aug 04, 2011 9:58 am

For clothing and appearance, all you have is a few sentences. I get the basic idea but I would like to see a little more behind this category.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptySun Aug 07, 2011 3:55 pm

Is there anything else that needs changeing? im sorry if i havent added enought, ive always been really bad about appearance description and clothing
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptySun Aug 07, 2011 4:07 pm

Personality is still lacking. Is the only thing this guy feels "EXPLODE EXPLODE EXPLODE EXPLODE"?

You're also still not paying attention to dates; if he was in the middle east, which was first attacked 2001, how could he be taken out "a few years later" as you say, when barely 2 years had passed in the RP time? You're also forgetting that Integra hired them in the 90's, meaning he'd have had to join up after the fact. Seriously, just say he was in 'Nam.
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyMon Aug 15, 2011 9:21 pm

Keep working on this. It's coming along well. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptySun Sep 04, 2011 1:14 am

You're pretty close to done. You still doing this?
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyMon Sep 12, 2011 3:40 pm

You haven't been on in nearly a month, and you haven't worked on this longer than that. Please respond in at most 3 days, or this will be disapproved due to loss of interest (too bad, this guy was kind of interesting).
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PostSubject: Re: Clay Lantz   Clay Lantz EmptyThu Sep 15, 2011 7:00 am

I agree. There has been no work on this and he didnt even reply to your last post which was over a week ago. If he needs to rework it, he can create another one and when the forum check is done, if his account hasn't posted, it is gone.

Disapproved, locked and moved.
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