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PostSubject: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Mon Jun 27, 2011 8:06 pm

Have you see the OVA or read the manga series of Hellsing? If so how far have you gotten? If not please direct your attention to youtube, and watch OVA 1-4 at least. Warning: If you have watched the anime we require you watch the OVA, or read the manga. The anime is not canon. This is not our opinion. This is the law set down by the creator of Hellsing, Kouta Hirano. I have read the entire Original Hellsing Manga.

Name: Duivel Micheals

Age: Looks mid-twenties, real age unknown.

Gender: Male

Physical appearance: Duivel is a tall man, about 6'9''. His body consists mostly of lean muscle and oddly no signs of body hair. His body upon careful inspection has faded scars that cover his entire body, they appear to be runes but not that any have been able to decipher of even find origin of. He has a long thick mane of black hair that ends at his shoulder blades but no facial hair to speak of. His eyes are a fiery bronze with almost seem to glow when looked at giving his face an other-worldly look.

In his second form his eyes in fact do glow to the point they actaully create light of their own. The runes on his body glow red and his skin becomes a dark tan color. Small hard nubs also appear just above each temple and his teeth appear more jagged than before.

In his final form his skin turns black and the runes glow white against his skin. His fingers turn into claws and horns grow from his head. He appears to gain about 50 pounds of muscle and his stomach becomes paunchy. He grow black leathery wings and viscous teeth that the lower canines stick out between the lips. His eyes can no longer be looked at as they appear to be burning orbs within his head.

In his final form

Clothing of choice: Duivel most commonly wear a black muscle shirt and knuckle gloves. On his legs Duivel wears cargo pants and basic shoes. His clothes are often cheap since they do not survive his changing into his final form.

Weaponry of choice: Duivel only wields two weapons, the first is a odd pistol he simply calls "Hellfire":

On normal appearance it looks to be a 500 S&W Magnum pistol, however further inspection would reveal unusual etching in the metal. The bullets also have similar etching, and light up red when fired from the pistol. When the bullet enters the body it causes both the inside and outside of the body to burn, against metal and other non-living material it has the same effects as a normal bullet. The weapon can only be used in his first or second form.

His second weapon appears to be a bastard sword with a black blade, however in his first form all he can do is pull the blade from its sheath before the weapon is too heavy for him to use. In second form he can wield it but must use both hands to swing the blade with any proficiency. In his final form he can wield it one handed. When he wields it in final form fiery runes blaze on the weapon and burns hot enough to melt most metals with a single cut.

Race: Special Human

Abilities: Duivel's powers come in three forms, in most cases he can control the transformation but in cases where he is extremely injured he change to a higher form without his control. When he changes of uses any of his weapons he develops something he calls "the hunger". Normally it does not bother him but when he does not remain in control of it he loses control of his emotions and is more likely to change forms. He does not know what exactly he feeds from but he has found two ways to feed, the first is through vigorous contact with a human, Duivel often feeds through sex. The second method has found only to work on vampires, by using his hand he wrenches the heart out of the vampires chest and drains energy from it. With each form his body changes as does his abilities.

Form 1: Meager supernatural strength, agility, stamina, durability, and reflexes. Normal human healing, unaffected by religious or blessed weapons.

Form 2: Regeneration may take a long amount of time for major damage (ie: 15 posts), medium supernatural strength, agility, stamina, durability, and reflexes, medium weakness to silver and blessed weaponry.

Form 3: Regeneration may take short time for major damage (ie: 5 posts), huge supernatural strength, agility, stamina, durability, and reflexes, great weakness to silver and blessed weaponry to a point its fatal to be hit by one. The reaction to symbols of faith is bad enough he cannot look at them or hear religious preaching without being in physical pain.

Organization: Unaligned

Personality: Duivel seems a bit apart from the rest of the world, might have something to do with not having much of a past. He seems to have a thing for protecting innocent people yet scoffing at religions idea of what an innocent person is. He tries to be charming to the women he meets and can't seem to wrap his head around homosexuality but doesn't fuss any if a man offers him a spot in his bed. He doesn't like authority much yet does see the protection it brings to others and so doesn't pay it any mind. He openly mock religion and when he has the time does things to undermine its authority and to spit in its face. He likes to party hard yet not beyond what he is willing to pay for in the morning.

Rank: NA

Biography: Duivel was not born, or at least not that he can remember, but he does remember being found. In a remote village in the Netherlands that had the evening before burst into flames. The fires were bright enough to cause the next village other to come to try and help but could not get there until the next morning, they found everything burned yet no sign of any of the people would had once lived there. Instead the villagers found a man wrapped in a cloak with nothing more than a pistol and a sword, they blamed him for the villager's disappearance and called him a devil. Duivel took the world they called him and later used it for his first name, the Dutch word for devil being duivel. For days they questioned him, berated him, refused him food or water in hopes of getting information which since Duivel had none was infuriating on all parts. After a time the villagers were angry, confused but put enough together that Duivel must not have been involved, this however did not keep them from keeping him locked up. That night something weird hit the village.

Vampires were nothing more than things to legend to the village but when they came and started slaughtering the villagers they had no idea what to do. In the confusion Duivel was released from his confinement and obtained his weapons, entering his second form he tore through the lot of them. When the battle was over Duivel went from fugitive to hero and the local preacher said how his sword cut through the "demons" like the Archangel Micheal's holy sword, Duivel took that and made his surname from it. Leaving the village battered but mostly alive Duivel went to hunt all that would harm the innocent. Along the way he heard of stories of others who fought against vampire like himself and he met groups that he cared little for like Section 13. He know just travels fighting the evil he meets or his brought to his attention.

RP sample: (This applies to all members and the sample needs to be 3 posts long minimum, and will include the style of your RPing, and a segment of a battle post.)
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Mon Jun 27, 2011 8:26 pm

I know this is a work in progress, but I am going to give a quick word: no magic. The runes seem to me to be just that, and I wanted to give you a heads up before you went any further. I think the idea is interesting, but again, magic - in any form - is not allowed.

Also, I see almost no weaknesses in this character. That will get you a disapproval from me if something isn't done about it.
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Tue Jun 28, 2011 1:17 am

There's a lot that needs to be changed with this character. The only feeding through sex thing is weird in and of itself, not to mention the fact that it has a potential to break our pg13 rule. Add to the fact that you have 3 forms, some of them with regeneration equal to some of the highest levels of vampire which no staff member in their right mind would approve. While you have at least a moderately good hand at describing the character, it is still way too overpowered for any staff member to approve. If you want an approval from me, you need to:

Remove the alternate forms
Remove the runes
Remove the burning bullets on the gun
Change the personality a bit (I'm sorry but I can't imagine him openly defiling a church will make for good reading material and it has the potential to offend other members of the site)
Since most of your description in the appearance section is about the alternate forms, remove that and add something different.
Do something about the biography please. The story reminds me a lot of the movie Legion and sounds a tad extreme for this character
And finally, add an RP Sample and battle sample.

I give you one week to work on that or you will get an immediate disapproval from me. That being said, if you need some help toning him down, send me a pm. Good luck!
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Tue Jun 28, 2011 7:22 am

Two quick little points. First, I'd just like to offer the idea of incendiary rounds in case you'd like to keep the burning bullet concept. That's the scientific, real world equivalent. Second, and I do apologize for stepping on the toes of a fellow staff member, but there is no rule against a personality being controversial or even borderline insulting to religion. This is a site based on fiction and our members are well versed in seperating their own opinions from their characters. So long as the anti-religious personality remains solely in character, there's no harm in it.
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Tue Jun 28, 2011 2:26 pm

I personally like the idea of this character and everything he does, but then again, there is almost no weakness to this guy and the little things you did put in to compensate for him just isn't enough. Kudos on the creativeness though.
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Tue Aug 09, 2011 3:06 am

Considering almost no work has been done on this page, if any, since Artisto gave his warning, and you haven't been on since the end of June, I'm putting it back into effect; one week before auto-dissaproval.
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PostSubject: Re: Duivel Micheals (WIP)   Tue Aug 16, 2011 2:06 am

It's been exactly one week and nothing has happened to this sheet and the owner has not come to the site. Auto-disapproved.
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